Sunday, September 07, 2008

Defenses down


20 comments:

Julie said...

You have linked the hard and the soft throughout your haiku. I like this. I like maelstrom/brick. I like hay/fading. I like yesterday/century. If we take the time span you claim I can well see the link between brick and hay.

Intelligent response to the prompt...

SandyCarlson said...

The image is truly one of defenses down. May we all experience hard walls cavorting like hay--perhaps returning to a natural state.

Anonymous said...

I love this idea, and that is just my kind of photo.

Anonymous said...

Incredible take on the prompt. I love the comparisons.

Quiet Paths said...

First of all it's a great photo for the prompt; a thousand words couldn't describe it better. 2nd, my brain did a total shift with cavorting like hay. Super.

sgreerpitt said...

I like this. Several of us have used walls metaphorically, but I like the fact that you used them literally!

Anonymous said...

lovely contrasting images here...

Anonymous said...

A nice bringing together and contrasting of images!

Raven said...

What an interesting juxtaposition of words/thoughts/ideas. Walls cavorting alone stopped me and made me think... then "like hay..." Hmmm. Very cool poem.

Kathie Brown said...

Like it! Like it! Well done, especially the wall cavorting like hay!

Regina said...

Any poem that has the word "maelstrom" in it is a winner in my book! It's just such an interesting word! I really liked this!

susan said...

I'm glad Julie made the link for me. :-)

me ann my camera said...

Dramatric contrast of hay and a bricks. A gulf of differences very difficult to bridge. Lovely.

Anonymous said...

Nathalie--
I really liked this haiku.

Like so many of the others, I was struck with the analogy between brick walls and hay cavorting.

Hay at play sways and leans in several directions, but usually has one preferred way (in my observations). I'm wondering if bricks have the same prediliction? And once they crumble, toward or away from each other, then what is the game?

I think it's the timelessness of the poem that strikes me. The endless play of matter on matter...

Thanks again--
Beth

Tumblewords: said...

This imparts an incredible feeling...love it!

anthonynorth said...

A great image in the words, there.

Anonymous said...

i agree with the previous comment. quite striking how you linked hard and soft.

Patois42 said...

The image and imagery are magnificent. What a great take on the prompt.

Anonymous said...

will never look at timie and bricks the same way... cavorting like hay... changes everything that went before...

Qaro said...

Very cool!