A
Tear:
A world
Inside which
I would lose myself,
Translucent ocean of grief,
Its fluxes dictated by its own moons, chimeras.
I
Want
To drown
In that world;
Lost in its currents,
To glide, drift, caressing that cheek,
Fall – dizziest moment – coming to rest on her breast.
To
Lick
The salt,
Taste the brine
Bitter with sorrow,
Forbidden dreams, sunken mermaids:
A whole world in torment, crying, calling in its sleep.
I
Must
Confess
This to you:
I feel no desire
To quench those tears, to lift her soul.
Those lips may murmur endearments but the heart smiles, still.
Tear image derived from stock by Dark-dragon-stock at DeviantArt.
18 comments:
I am thinking of a song that may not be, "A tear falls."
Basking in misery here?
Or voice/thoughts of the other woman?
je vais te jeter [fr]
I will throw you [eng]
:-)
..
It touches a chord..
changing orbits
This is a very visual tear...
Excellent!-I like the way this is laid out. I agree with gautami, it is touching.
This is poignant. Beautiful.
Beautifully done. Touching.
never seen better fib poetry !! so beautifula nd touching !!
Nathalie
To drown in another's tears, to be in that world--this is poignant and difficult. Paradoxical, to feel it and be it yet in some way be a world away.
I really enjoyed looking at the shape of this poem and your carefully thought-out placement of each line. The subject matter is very touching.
I did a shape poem this week also.
Tears can be an ocean of sorrow, but also capable of cleansing one's soul.
I loved this. And the texture and movement of the tear in the photo is a perfect pairing for your poignant words.
Biber's lachrymose music perfectly fits your shape poem.
Beautifully written. So poignant and touching.
tender and lovely in an oh so sad yet accepting way.
im speechless,
and moved....
Beautifully done - the shape is fitting and the words are deeply moving.
looks great with the picture! very powerful
every so once inawhile one finds a place to hold onto and drift... this is that place... it is beautiful...
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